This story was amazing and I enjoyed it.
   How God Created Mother
   God took the fragrance of a flower,  The majesty of a tree,  The gentleness of a morning a dew  The calm of a quiet sea,  The beauty of a twilight hour  The soul of a starry night  The laughter of the rippling brook,  The grace of a bird in flight,  Then God fashioned from these things  A creation like no other,  And when His masterpiece was through,  He called it simply...MOTHER.
   Happy Mother's Day! 
      
I found this story when i went to your profile after reading A Real Good Man(which is an amzaing story btw). I just want to say you are an amzingly talented writer. Please keep the stories coming. My day was spent reading your stories lol.  
      
I like your stories a great deal.  You show real potential as a writer. 
However, your typos and/or spelling errors, doubled up words are a distraction - sometimes I cannot figure out what you intended to say. 
In telling you that, I think this story - Forever Was a Lie - was the worst of them, you do seem to have gotten better, for I don't see as many issues in A Real Good Man. 
You should considered finding a beta reader. I'm sure you can find someone on this site who is willing to preread for you. I am willing to do so myself, so just consider it. 
I look forward to more of your stories, 
Good luck! 
  
  
  
      
Great story, I am a sucker for a happy ending. 
      
beautiful 
it's truely beautiful 
      
Loryn K. (Chapter 26) - Sat 17 Oct 2009 
Aw, this was a lovely story. I didn't check to see if you completed it but kudos! There are allot of spelling ang grammatical errors but a couple of proof reads should clear that up! Good luck on this story and any future stories you have! 
      
Ameire (Chapter 26) - Fri 16 Oct 2009 
I Really liked this! Good job. I'm a little on the vengeful side- I personally can't wait un til Naraku gets out of that prison. Just so I can imagine what then inuyasha, inupapa, and Sesshoumaru do to him. Heh heh heh . Oh, and let's not forget Kagome's father MAmoru, was it? 
      
Rei (Chapter 2) - Wed 14 Oct 2009 
Sounds interesting so far, I hope she kicks his ass. Or blows him off when he attempts to fulfill the bet. Heh heh heh , he deserves to fall in love with his intended target. 
      
I love your story. But I get the feeling Ive read something like this before, is this posted on another site? Anyway, I hope you update soon. 
      
Nice beginning, I can't wait to see what you have in store for us. I look forward to the next chapter :) 
      
Poor Kagome- it looks like there is a lot of heartbreak ahead for her.  On the upside, I LOVE stories where Sesshie breaks Kagome's heart.  Go For It! 
      
   
   
 
 
 
										 
									
									
																										
								
								
								
																								
															
													
					
				
								
				
				
			
				
				
		
				
	
			
			
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