Awe, the ending was so cute! I expected them to win. But I like that they didn't, it makes things different. 
You wrote this really well, so good luck! I have a feeling that you'll be the one to advance. It's simple, sweet, and gives you that "awe" feeling. Mine was too angsty and troublesome, to be honest. xD 
      
   
   
 
 
 
										 
									
									
																										
								
								
								
																								
															
													
					
				
								
				
				
			
				
				
		
				
	
			
			
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