Such an excellent first chapter.  It was so gripping to read.  I love reading non-dialogued introspectives on characters and i think you portrayed kagome so well.  A lot of people write her presence in the feudal era as a given, but at the same time, kagome is just a normal teen girl with so many insecurities.  She is PLAGUED in the anime/manga about her role and identity in the group (and also about whether or not she should stay there.) 

This line: "Besides, she could wear her mask of cheerfulness a little while longer." made my heart twinge.  It was so well put after her own thoughts a little before.  You captured the bittersweet mood so well.  I hope this review isnt giving you a toothache so far... >.<

Sesshoumaru pondering the meaning of happiness and kindness is something that a lot of people deal with too (i think). The internal voice of sesshoumaru was very interesting because it was warm and definitely multi-syllabic compared to his usual 'hn.' Excellent set up for k and s meeting!  I can't waaaaaaiiiit!!

Finally - Kagome leaves the Inu-tachi or group or tachi, not itachi.  Itachi means weasel in japanese... >.< lol

ducky out!

I like how this has started out.  You have a talent for descriptive detail, too.  I noticed a couple of typos here and there, but nothing big.  I hope you update soon.

Very well-written. I like how descriptive you are. I would really, really like to read more and see where you take this. Keep up the fantastic work!

I really like this! I don't see much of a problem with anything, save for the fact that Sessy seems a bit schizo. Other than that, the descriptions are nice, the grammar and spelling seem fine, and I can't wait for the next chapter!

I saw a couple of very minor spelling issues, but nothing to really detract from the story.  I like the way it has started out.  You definitley stopped at the right spot to keep the reader interested.  I hope that you continue this soon.

i believe i had a dense moment, i forgot there were many ways to spell Ah Un...my appologies!!

Interesting beginning, details are well thought out an the story flows nicely.  A couple of the paragraphs were a bit big to read on a computer screen, but I found no other problems than that.  Keep up the good work :).

Hairann

well that was interesting, sessh having an internal debate with himself...very tinteresting indeed...i did notice one thing, the way you spelled A-Un, it should be Ah-Un, just figured id let ya know, i really wanna see what will come next!!