Warn a person that the story is a tragedy! There is a reason I try not to read sad stories like this!

aaawww!! i'm nearly in tears! beautifully written and i hope sessomaru does find kagome again, everybody deservers a second chance, great strory by the way :)

Nicely done though it does need a bit of work, it's not bad for a beginner, however, I would suggest making your sentences longer.  Instead of having a lot of short sentences, try combineing some of them as it will help the paragraphs for flow better.

I wish you much luck in your future writing.

Hairann