I really like the idea of your story. It's different in a good way and I can't wait to see what happens next.
I really like the story, but I think the way you are writing it should be put into kagome's diary. Because if not it could get a little messy later in the chapters. I believe you could fill more in. I do like how the story is though, good job doll. 
-Camille. 
      
Great story, keep it coming. 
      
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