Keep it coming.
Both chapters are great, keep it coming. 
      
Lemons aren't a necessary evil.... just watch the numerous author's notes... they can break up the 'flow' of the story.  It is a good tale so far. I'm hoping Sesshoumaru gets knocked down a couple of pegs when he realizes that he doesn't know as much as he thinks he does. 
Looking forward to more! 
      
I wonder why he just left like that? 
      
I like it, I find the fact that you had her making him question his own motives really cool. I can't wait for more. Thank you for your story 
Stina 
      
This story sounds interesting, keep it coming. 
      
You and I have something in common, we are both writing our first fan-fiction. Your story is not stupid and the descriptions are just fine. Keep going your writing will improve tremendously. I think you did a wonderful job with your first chapter! 
      
Midian (Chapter 1) -  Fri 24 May 2013 
Your doing good, keep it up and bring the smut :) 
      
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