| please do not wait me wait for another chapter, it is painful.
K,T,M- Sun 01 Jun 2008
| i hope u update soon
tealeavesgreen- Mon 26 May 2008
The story itself seems quite intriguing. However, there is one thing that's really dragging it down; verb conjugation. You flit between past, past perfect, and present tenses, and I've noticed you using the wrong tense when paired with a modal (would/could/should/etc), too.
I think your story has a lot of potential, and I'm going to try to keep reading it because the plot interests me. But it would improve a LOT if you used grammar check and paid extra attention to your verb conjugation.
elvira- Mon 26 May 2008
poor rin!....lol
update soon!
| This is a really great story, I love it when Kag gets some strength. Cool thing with Rin too. Please update soon!
Azera- Mon 26 May 2008
| This is a really great story, I love it when Kag gets some strength. Cool thing with Rin too. Please update soon!
Sesshomaru's Loyal Servent- Sun 25 May 2008
| Awww... so cute but will Rin leave Kagome and wat emotions was Kagome feeling
K,T,M- Sun 25 May 2008
| i hope u update soon
elvira- Sun 18 May 2008
| wow...update soon!...
Sesshomaru's Loyal Servent- Fri 16 May 2008
| In the chapter where it speaks of sango and shippo not eating it should be ate not eat. I like your story please continue.
K,T,M- Fri 16 May 2008
| i hope u can update soon
Sesshomaru's Loyal Servent- Thu 01 May 2008
| I loved it and cant wait 4 u 2 update again but how big is the 'little' snake and will it have a name
sesskagluver- Thu 01 May 2008
i really liked your story
please update soon
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